“Get me out of here” shouted Rachael as she awoke to find herself locked in a white padded room. She yelled and banged on every wall, but no one came. She started to pace back and forth, trying to figure out how she got there. She was so confused and she couldn’t figure it out . She laid down on her white cot like bed and looked up at the white padded ceiling contemplating what she was going to do to get out of there. Her eyes began to shut and she soon was sound asleep.
“BOOM BOOM” someone banged on the door. She woke up and looked at the door a nurse came in holding a tray with mini cups. “time for your morning medicine “said the nurse. “wh…..what medicine?” Rachael said questioningly. “The ones you take every morning Rachael” the nurse said
“What are you talking about? every morning? I don’t take pills, I don’t know why I’m here, or how even got here.” Rachael said confused “Rachael are you feeling okay?” the nurse asked concerned. “how do you even know my name? I have no idea who you are and there isn’t anything wrong with me.” she said angrily. “Rachael don’t you remember how you got here?” the nurse asked “No! not at all. All I remember is that I go to Beverley Hills high and I’m a 16 year old cheerleader” Rachael shouted “Its ok Rachael I’ll go get Dr. Taylor.” said the nurse as she left the room. The nurse had no idea she left the door wide open and Rachael seen this as a way to escape, so she dashed for the door.
The nurse whose name is Denise went to Dr. Taylor’s office and knocked on the door. “Come in” shouted a voice from the other side of the door. “Oh, Hello nurse Denise what can I do for you today” Dr. Taylor said happily. “ummm Dr. Taylor one of the uhhh girl patients are questioning about how they got here.” nurse Denise said timidly. “Well tell her what you tell all the other patients who ask how they got here.” Dr. Taylor said agitated “She’s different then the rest of the patients Dr. Taylor” said Denise. “DENISE JUST DO WHAT I TELL YOU OK I DON’T PAY YOU TO THINK I PAY YOU TO DO YOUR JOB.” yelled Dr. Taylor. Denise left the room with no questions asked and headed back to Rachael’s room.
Rachael was almost down the hallway when she bumped into a boy. He had sandy brown hair and hazel colored eyes. He was tall and cute. “oh, my bad” she said shyly “oh, no problem.” he said laughing. “I’m Rachael and you?” asked Rachael. “I’m William and why are you in such a rush?” William asked. “I’m trying to figure out where I am and why I’m here.” Rachael said “It’s ok Rachael we are all trying to figure that out.” William said suspenseful. “What are you talking about all? Who are you? what is happening? Rachael said. After that William disappeared and Rachael felt a heavy cold breath on the back of her neck. She turned around to find that it was nurse Denise with a huge needle that had liquid squirting out the tip. Nurse Denise stab her with the needle and she passed out.
this is part one of my story i hope everyone likes it :D
ReplyDeletewow this is suspenseful i want to read more
ReplyDeletewow...scary! i want to know whats going on!! good story though, its very suspenseful. :D
ReplyDeleteIt is very suspenseful... good job on the first part... can't wait for part two :)
ReplyDeleteYour story was incredibly suspenseful. Excellent job!
ReplyDeletevery nice job:) ver creative idea and great details!
ReplyDeleteNice job with building suspense and creating a sense of confusion in both rachael and william. You also gave us a good picture of the doctor through his actions
ReplyDeleteI can't wait for you to finish this story. I am curious as to why she ended up in the hospital in the first place. Great job with your story.
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